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Re: No Mere Tourist
This is really good. I've never read an essay on here before, because it's just not my idea of fun. I accidentally stumbled on this one from the main menu, ...
Jan 21, 2007 -
Re: Mercy of the Sword Saint: Chapter 1
Purple Balloon. I'm sorry that I got in the middle of you and Scribes 'Debate' I didn't mean to intrude. I've read a small bit of your work before, and ...
Jan 18, 2007 -
Re: Mercy of the Sword Saint: Chapter 4
I reread the prologue, and I don't believe that I missed anything. I love all of your fight scenes, and I think they are very well written, don't get me ...
Jan 18, 2007 -
Re: Never Been Kissed (Revised)
Hey, Writergirl. Great job on getting things started so fast. I love how you quickly laid out the fact that there will be action and romance. It makes it easy ...
Jan 18, 2007 -
Re: Mercy of the Sword Saint: Chapter 4
I just read your reply to my critique on Chapter 3. You asked me to keep giving you grammar errors that I find, so here are a few for Chapter ...
Jan 17, 2007 -
Re: Mercy of the Sword Saint: Chapter 4
Hey Scribe. I kind of think that this chapter is a bit confusing. I just didn't recognize some of the names, I guesse. I don't know what it was about ...
Jan 17, 2007 -
Re: Mercy of the Sword Saint: Chapter 3
Hey Scribe, Great job on the third Chapter. I was excited to see that the plot was finally said in black and white. I read this Chapter, and I really ...
Jan 17, 2007 -
Re: Mercy of the Sword Saint: Chapter 2
Hey, Great Second Chapter. I loved the fight scene. Usually I find fight scenes a little bit confusing, because it seems like the writer just gets too excitted and wrapped ...
Jan 14, 2007 -
Re: Mercy of the Sword Saint: Chapter 1
Okay. So, I have spent the Better part of four and a half hours rereading your work, chapters 1-3. I took into account the things you said after my reply, ...
Jan 13, 2007 -
Re: Mercy of the Sword Saint: Chapter 1
Hey. Thanks so much for taking my critique in such a high account. I'm honestly flattered. I wasn't expecting that. Also, thanks for standing up for me with writergirl. Actually, ...
Jan 13, 2007 -
Re: THE MARIONETTE
Hey, I like this idea. It really works. I think that if you were to change a few things though, it could read more smoothly. For enstance, when you wrote: ...
Jan 12, 2007 -
Re: Forever Faithful
Hey! I had no idea that you could write Poetry. I was honestly impressed. A few minor things I noticed were that when you wrote: "it would tale a whale ...
Jan 12, 2007 -
Re: draft of prologue CRITIQUES NEEDED!!
Hey, this is really good. I've never read a story on someone that is in an institution, so I admire you for your original idea. I'm excitted to see where ...
Jan 12, 2007 -
Re: Mercy of the Sword Saint: Chapter 1
Hey, this is Crimson Twilight here, and I wanted to tell you that I am so impressed with the way that you have stayed with this story for so long. ...
Jan 11, 2007 -
Re: Chionophobia #16 /P
Hey. This was good, and it held my attention the whole time. I was confused when you went from Johnathon to Kyle. I wasn't sure which one was getting married ...
Jan 11, 2007
